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I'm writing a featured mystery! :)
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Squinky
Squinky

Feb-11-2007 09:33

It takes place in London. Although someone else already beat me to the punch in writing about Shakespearean theatre in London (the Romeo and Juliet mystery)....well, I decided to center mine on a different traditional play and only with many, many more twists. I'm thinking it'd get a Hard or Really Hard rating.

Not just that but I think London needs more featured mysteries too!

IRL I'm a New Yorker (not to mention a chick posing as a dude!) but have extensively travelled the UK and seen much of England and Ireland's rich history, tradition, and culture. I'm incorporating a lot of English local color and slang in this, and using British spellings instead of American spelling.

If this mystery does well I'd like to write more for London, and for the other cities when I get a chance to go to them. But mostly London for I have a soft spot for it, and New York since it's my hometown. Me loves the Old Yorke a bit more than the New York. :P

I'm almost done with the intro for this one. I'd like to post it and get feedback. If anyone's interested in reading it, does so and thinks it has a chance of becoming an FM, please let me know! Thanks! :)

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Squinky
Squinky

Feb-11-2007 16:05

I hopped on the tube and headed to the Old Vic where there was quite a crowd assembled. I gave the bouncer my ticket and the usher led me to my seat: Ms. Diamond must have had heard real good things about me from Shady, I got a second-row seat with a maginificent view of the stage.

I was never much of a theatre buff, I simply never had the time to go. But I'm never one to turn down something free, and hey, I deserved a holiday of some type. Looking around at the people around me, I realized I was sitting the wealthy elite who were seasoned theatre goers, along with the critics from the newspapers. I also recognized Samantha from the Imperial Library, who I waved at. I settled into my seat and got ready to sit back and enjoy the play.

Well into the play when an illustriously-decked out Margot Diamond was onstage, she belted out the infamous line, "Out damn spot! Out I say!"

Suddenly, without warning, the massive spotlight fixture came off its rail!

Margot, paralyzed with fear, let out a shrill scream and then was quickly crushed to death by the falling spotlight. The audience gasped and screamed. I quickly leapt out of my seat and ran up to the stage to meet a flushed and shocked stage manager.

"I don't know how this could have happened!" he cried as the rest of his cast panicked, screamed, and dispersed. "It truly is the horrifying curse of the Scottish Play!"

Suddenly, I felt terrible for saying "Macbeth" a second time in Owl and Walnut. Was I really responsible for this stage star's death?

I was lost in my own thoughts until a tugging on my sleeve pulled me out of it. I was greeted by a short and pretty woman in stylish clothing.

"Sir, Samantha tells me you're a private investigator. My name is Pravina Moore, I'm the costume designer for this play and have been Margot's best friend for years." I could see tears in her eyes.


Squinky
Squinky

Feb-11-2007 16:07

"I'm not sure about taking this one on, Pravina," I told her. "The police should be here any minute and rule this out as an accident. I think it's an accident."

Then I stopped myself. Suddenly I was flooded back with the memory of how affable and open she seemed to me at the bar, and "I think someone is after me."

"Sorry Pravina, I take that back. This might not have been an accident."

"I don't think so either. I can already think of a few people who wouldn't want her around, but everyone's saying it's just the curse of the Scottish Play. Oh, the newspapers are going to have a field day on this!"

A tearful Pravina begged of me, "Please take this case on before the police and the newspapers start making a huge media blitz out of the whole thing, I beg of you! Even though Margot was famous, she was in a tangled web of lovers, ex-lovers, old clients, and I think she was married to a barmy old sod at one point too. The police will think she just deserved it. Please do this, money is no object. Margot was the best friend I've ever known."

I couldn't possibly say no to this woman. I indeed had seen what a kind and charming person Margot was, she was just as beautiful inside as she was out. Famous or not, Margot deserved justice. And I badly needed the dosh.

So much for my fantasy of a sunny holiday in Spain.

* * * * * *

Whew! That's what I got. Let me all know what you think! --Rachel R. aka Squinky (yes, I'm a girl posing as a dude!)

Squinky
Squinky

Feb-14-2007 09:29

Update 2/14:

Well kiddies, the mystery's about 70% done. This intro has been revamped quite a bit-- so much that it's going to be split into 2 parts. I just need to write the twist, ending, and some character dialogues. Then it's off to the board to see if it gets used!

Squinky
Squinky

Feb-14-2007 09:29

Update 2/14:

Well kiddies, the mystery's about 70% done. This intro has been revamped quite a bit-- so much that it's going to be split into 2 parts. I just need to write the twist, ending, and some character dialogues. Then it's off to the board to see if it gets used!

Paranoid_Android
Paranoid_Android
Story Teller

Feb-14-2007 14:43

It'll be great to see a new FM up when you finish :)

Squinky
Squinky

Feb-14-2007 17:52

I'm about 80% done now-- just have the twist and I'm still planning a nice big ending-- keep your fingers crossed for me that it'll get approved. :) If it does, I want to write many more of them! I found that I really had a fun time writing this and definitely want to do more. My style's an odd mix of tradition and innovation.

But hopefully by Monday or so I should be done!

ShadowChii
ShadowChii
Yarn Weaver

Mar-1-2007 00:45

Just curious, did your FM get accepted? (I'm looking forward to playing it!) I wrote one myself about two months ago and never even got a response back...

Henry Walker
Henry Walker

Jul-10-2007 18:57

Sounds so cool. it kind of sounds like a story that I wrote for my own amusement. I've never writen a story online before. Totally awesome. I LOVE IT!!!

Botsie Boots
Botsie Boots
Old Shoe

Jul-20-2007 08:35

where do you go to either sign up or submit your mysteries. Do I need to talk to Ben

Anikka
Anikka
Babelfish

Jul-20-2007 10:12

No Botsie, just go to the Writer's Workshop link and start writing. :)

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