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Romeo and Juliet
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Sleuth Admin
Tale Spinner
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Mar-1-2005 18:06
A round of applaus everybody, for Jojo227 and his new featured mystery: Romeo and Juliet *yayyyy* *clap* *clap*
Romeo and Juliet is the first featured mystery to be set in London. Enjoy.
Please leave feedback/bugs, etc here.
Once again, thanks Jojo.
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Jojo
Old Shoe
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Mar-1-2005 18:37
I found too things wrong.
1) Unable to help myself, I wandered until I found one marked, Juliet. - there shouldn't be a comma after marked.
2) I don't want to spoil so I will have to say this without specifics. The hair belonged to the wrong person. This wouldn't be obvious...but since it is mentioned in the final accusation part, it seems funny. Maybe you should switch a few things...like who has what type of hair and who the hair belongs to.
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Jojo
Old Shoe
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Mar-1-2005 18:37
two*
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Sleuth Admin
Tale Spinner
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Mar-1-2005 19:38
The problem with the hair evidence is straightened out (no pun or extra clue intended). Also, the title has been changed to "Staged Murder" which is what Jojo originally intended.
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Jojo
Old Shoe
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Mar-1-2005 19:39
Thanks Ben!
(No pun intended....are you sure?) :-)
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Dr. Falco Maltese
Well-Connected
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Mar-1-2005 19:49
The door marked "personal" whatever whatever should be marked "personnel" and there's a funny sentence in the intro where it seems the woman is crying in order to see the detective, or something...anyway, I hope you can see which one I mean.
I enjoyed the mystery, Ben and Jojo - thanks, guys!
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calalta
Well-Connected
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Mar-2-2005 00:06
Very well written JoJo and quite enjoyable, i also think it is a good level since many do not have the contacts or experience in London as of yet.
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kidgame2004
Vigilante
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Mar-2-2005 07:37
Great job jojo! I just played your featured mystery a while ago and it was very fun and enjoyable. I really like doing featured cases when they come up.
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Makensie Brewer
Super Steeper
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Mar-2-2005 15:18
I found that the Featured Mystery by Jojo was very exciting and well put together! I'm looking forward to the next Featured Mystery...I really enjoy those!!
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CubsGirl
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Mar-3-2005 11:15
I'm not allowed to register so....:(
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CubsGirl
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Mar-3-2005 11:15
I mean subscribe...
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