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Lucky Stiff

May-21-2008 09:24


We’re all excited about the newest addition to Sleuth! In anticipation of the upcoming launch of the USS Sleuthetania, we hereby challenge all sleuths to a launch party contest to celebrate her inauguration.

Your mission, if you choose to accept it, is to finish the story of launch night. We’re giving you a scenario below, and we’d like you to respond in character. Tell us what you see, hear, do, and experience, from the time you arrive at the dock, view the Sleuthetania christening ceremony, through walking down the gangplank, up until the ship sails out to sea. The more imaginative and creative, the better!

-The Rules-

*One entry per person, please.

*Spelling and grammar DO count, so please use the appropriate tools, and edit, edit, edit.

*For those who think this is a ‘role-playing’ contest, we’re looking for what your character specifically does. Whether you choose to interact with other players is completely up to you. You MAY choose to keep your entry entirely to yourself (ie-without contact with others), and still have a very interesting story to read. Get innovative! You CAN do this!!

*There’s a 6000 character maximum limit. That means 3 boxes. We recommend you use a word editing program and copy-and-paste your final entry into sleuth. This avoids problems such as others posting in between your boxes, timing-out, etc.

*ALL entries are due NO LATER than turnover, Monday, June 2 (11:59:59pm). No exceptions.

*NOTE: Because we have no way of knowing exactly when Admin’s launch will happen, we’ve used some creative libel here. Whatever Ben’s come up with will be wonderful, of course. But we’d like you to stick with our version for this contest, please.

*I'm not the only judge, but my decision is final. In case of disputes, talk to the hand. ;)

-The Prizes-

1st prize Sleuth $150,000
2nd prize Sleuth $75,000
3rd prize Sleuth $40,000.

Ok, here we go! The scene is set...


Heimlich VonVictor
Heimlich VonVictor

Jun-1-2008 20:21

I was finally going to own a home. That was the exact thought that was going through my mind when I realized I was no longer moving, and the man in front of me was staring at me as if waiting for a response.

“I’m terribly sorry, could you repeat yourself?” I asked sheepishly.

“I said we’re here pal! That’ll be $13.40 for the ride.” He demanded. I reached into my wallet and fumbled with it for a minute before pulling out $15 and telling him to keep the change. Grabbing the arm of my “traveling companion” I opened the door and stepped out into the orange glow of the setting sun. Immediately the smell of the salt air invaded my nostrils and I heard the distant cry of a seagull. I looked out at New York Harbor, a place where my father had made his living so many years ago, and felt overcome by the sheer size of the ocean liner sitting before me. Of course I would never have been able to afford a ticket, but fortunately fate had seen fit to bestow me with the chance of a lifetime.

I glanced down at the girl whose arm I was holding, she was tiny, pale, with long silky hair the color of fresh strawberries. She wasn’t looking at the ship, or the marvelous ocean before her; in fact her gaze was fixed squarely upon the ground, or perhaps it was the cuffs binding her hands together that interested her. She looked at me, not for the first time, with a look of sadness in her eyes. I looked back, not for the first time, and noticed that her eyes were the deepest shade of blue I had ever seen.

I stared into the sapphires that held so much sadness and for the first time she spoke to me, “We’re departing on the Sleuthetania? I didn’t think the police force would pay for such a luxury for a simple prisoner transport.”

I shook my head, “If I were a police officer, we wouldn’t be leaving this way. I’m a private investigator hired by your parents to bring you home.” It had never dawned on me that she may have mistaken me for a police officer, but then again we hadn’t spoken much since I cuffed her and informed her that she wa

Heimlich VonVictor
Heimlich VonVictor

Jun-1-2008 20:23

coming with me. My curiosity got the better of me and I finally had to ask, “So what did you do that you think the police are after you?”

The girl’s eyes shut tight and she began shaking uncontrollably. Tears were streaming down her face. She stuttered out, “I… I… I stole from my parents! My fa… fath… father botched a b… bus… business deal with one of his clients and as payment h… h… he promised I would m… marry the man! I took one of their paintings and sold it to pay for my ticket to America. I thought at least if I was tracked down, I would go to jail and not have to marry him!” She collapsed on the ground crying uncontrollably. Her hair clung to her tear stained face and I felt a pang of guilt in my stomach. This girl couldn’t be more than sixteen years old, she had her whole life ahead of her and here I was taking her back to a place worse than prison.

I felt myself gulp and try to swallow the uncomfortable feelings I had. The McIlroys had paid me good money to bring Rachel back to them, and I couldn’t back out now. I wasn’t even going to enjoy my trip on the Sleuthetania now, and they had paid for my ticket! I looked down at Rachel; she looked like an angel crying because she had fallen from heaven. I grabbed her arm again and pulled her to her feet.

“I’m sorry Rachel,” I plainly said, “but your parents have paid me for your safe return, and I can’t just go back on my word.” She nodded and came willingly as I walked towards the ship. The sheer amount of people around us astounded me. Many of them wore jewelry that was worth more than the apartment I lived in back home. Was I really willing to sacrifice the life of a young girl to achieve my dream of owning a home? Yes, I had to. I was duty bound to return Rachel safe to her parents.

As I walked up the gangplank an arm stuck out in front of me, “Tickets and names please!” A man dressed in a full sailor’s uniform demanded of me.

“Heimlich VonVictor and Rachel McIlroy,” I said as I presented the sailor with our tickets, “we have two

Heimlich VonVictor
Heimlich VonVictor

Jun-1-2008 20:23

cabins reserved in first class.”

The sailor ran a finger over his manifest before stopping and exclaiming, “Ah! Mr. VonVictor welcome aboard! We’ve been expecting you. You’ll be in cabin 20A and Ms. McIlroy will be in cabin 21A. We’ve made the requested modifications to 21A as requested by Mr. and Mrs. McIlroy.” He handed me two keys and gestured for us to step onto the ship. I wondered what the modifications could be as I stepped onto the ship with my cargo in tow. I could hear a band performing “Amazing Grace” off in the distance and I made a mental note that I would have to track them down and listen to the music later on.

As we walked past the dining hall, the smell of exquisite food became overwhelming. I was actually going to eat gourmet food, and rub elbows with rich people! This was going to be a great experience for me. My thoughts were broken when I realized we had arrived at our cabins. It was then that I realized what the modification was; her lock was on the outside of the door.

I opened the door and was taken aback by the size of the room. It had a private bathroom attached, two couches, several paintings, and a king size bed. It was then that I noticed someone sitting on the bed, it was Shady.

He walked up to me and handed me a stack of bills, “Good job Mac! Here’s your payment from the McIlroys. They’re afraid you might have second thoughts. I’ll take it from here.” he quickly stated. Rachel sadly slumped down on the bed and I took one last look at her as I shut the door and locked it. Shady pulled the key out of my hand and pocketed it before walking off.

I opened the door to my own room and found it almost identical. I slumped down on the bed and thought of the girl in the next room who I had just condemned to a life of hell. The crying angel who had looked at me so sadly was a mere twenty feet from me and I couldn’t even see her. It was then that I decided I had to save her.

Lucky Stiff

Jun-3-2008 10:21

Thanks to everyone who entered, looks like there's some great writing here. Bear with us and we'll have some results for you soon!

Tireless Tiger

Jun-3-2008 14:43

Do you have a winner yet? And where did the bear come from? :-P

OK, whats a story about a ship without a parody of "Gilligan's Island"

Just sit right back and you'll hear a tale,
A tale of a fateful trip
That started for DPI
Aboard this brand new ship.

A Director was not a sailing man,
Another was demure.
All detectives set sail that day
For a three day tour, a three day tour.

The passengers then acted up,
A crime spree was involved,
If not for the skills of the agency
The case would be unsolved, The case would be unsolved.

The team met up on board of the grand Sleuthetania
With lilangel
And ctown too,
Bonelady and topkebab,
Aunt Pittypat
Miranda, Andy and kymkatt,
Here in DPI.

Tireless Tiger

Jun-3-2008 15:09

So this is the tale of the agency,
They're here for a long, long time,
Some say with ctown running things,
It's an uphill climb.

The Directors of the agency,
Will do their very best,
To help the other detectives,
To meet their objectives.

With hairs, with threads, with threatening notes,
And all of the footprints,
Like all the other villains,
The killer will be caught.

So join us here each case my friends,
You're sure to see a crime,
Solved by the detectives,
Here in DPI

Old Shoe

Jun-4-2008 22:25

Thank you to everyone who participated in this contest. All the entries were great and the judges and myself thoroughly enjoyed reading each and every one of them.

*drum roll please...*

The results!

1st place - Heimlich VonVictor
2nd place - Ctown28
3rd placce - Aknas

Congratulations to the winners and congratulations also to those who narrowly missed out. It was a tough call.

Big thank you to my co-judges Lady Jas and Breitkat, and Breitkat for the idea, and her help in getting it up and running.

I hope everyone enjoyed this contest as much as I did!

Heimlich VonVictor
Heimlich VonVictor

Jun-4-2008 22:47

Wow :) That just made my night! Thank you so much! I showed it to one of my friends and she asked me, "So what happens next?" and on my way to work I was wondering, "What does happen next?" If I can work it, you may have just read the intro to my next scripted mystery.

Tireless Tiger

Jun-4-2008 23:15

Congrats Heimlech and thanks to tk and the judges, this was yet another fun contest to play. I can't help but thinking though.... "If I had posted the Gilligans Island one as my official entry, would I have come in first? ;-)

Lucky Stiff

Jun-4-2008 23:46

Hey ketamine! Don't steal my script!
*Reports ketamine for identity theft*

Yep, congrats to all the contestants, this was a great contest!

And Ctown, you can keep thinking about that ;)

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