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Nov-19-2004 16:44

I think palmer has my favorite bio. Not sure why, and pretty sure I don't understand it, but there you go.

Mar-29-2006 09:27

I just updated mine. So check it out okay.

Mar-31-2006 17:20

My boi is very minimalist (:)

Apr-1-2006 18:04

*typo
boi=bio

Apr-4-2006 18:03

Check out my new bio please, and give me some feedback.

Apr-8-2006 02:11

Okay here comes feedback.

Isabel, it's really really good. With very few words, you managed to establish enough tone to make whoever reads it curious enough to come back and see if there is another chapter. Plus...hey...free of grammatical errors, lol. I wish my own students did half as well.

You've also done a really good job of writing it with your audience in mind by incorporating several of the familiar parts of the both the game and things people have dropped on other threads (the skirt bit). This is really important . Writing for other people is quite different from just dumping a bazillion words on your diary. You're good at it...I hope you keep writing.

Apr-8-2006 16:06

Thank you for the feedback. Isabel's my other detective. Your feedback means so much to me.

Apr-8-2006 18:44

No probs...believe me it's like nine drunken monkeys funner to give feedback here than on essays from undergrads who have 45 minutes and 1 pen to try to explain 150 years of social philosophy.

The Madame Giry one is good too -this character has a more vulnerable tone than the other one. I'll check back to see what you do with it!

Jul-7-2006 14:39

Serena Siren's bio..wow
*Smiles to self.*

Jul-7-2006 23:46

I like my bio. hee hee. no shameless plug here huh? lol. There are really so many good ones out there.

Jul-10-2006 15:25

I like my bio,but I also like Serina Sirens.