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Feb-18-2006 02:41

Can you Haiku?
Etymology: Japanese
: an unrhymed verse form of Japanese origin having three lines containing usually 5, 7, and 5 syllables respectively

Maddie got a gun
"bang bang" shot him in the head
woke up, just a dream

Feb-18-2006 05:32

I like that, it's got a nice rhythm to it. I've always thought rhythm is more important to a poem than rhyme. But you seem to have rhymes covered as well. :)

I think this poem by John Cooper Clarke is great. You have to say it aloud to get the full effect. You get drawn to saying it in a certain rhythm.

I wanna be your vacuum cleaner
Breathing in your dust,
I wanna be your Ford Cortina
I will never rust,
If you like your coffee hot
Let me be your coffee pot,
You call the shots,
I wanna be yours.
I wanna be your raincoat
For those frequent rainy days,
I wanna be your dreamboat
When you want to sail away,
Let me be your teddy bear
Take me with you anywhere,
I don't care
I wanna be yours.
I wanna be your electric meter
I will not run out,
I wanna be the electric heater
You'll get cold without,
I wanna be your setting lotion
Hold your hair in deep devotion,
Deep as the deep Atlantic ocean
that's how deep is my devotion.

You never answered by question about there being rhythm to Haiku

Feb-18-2006 05:53

No I don't think there is rhythm to Haiku. Its just 5 7 5 syllables.

Feb-18-2006 05:56

David is funny
Maddie is too, but Coco
is clever. And you?

Feb-18-2006 06:07

Hmm That poem sucked.

A hunting I go
when miss coco tells me so
tis for fame I know.

Feb-18-2006 06:18

I'm not sure if I'm drunk or if you are Miss Maddie but I'm seeing every thing in rhyme or is that rhythm or is that rhyme or is that...I give up.

Feb-18-2006 07:39

Not sure if she's drunk
They call her Agatha Misty
But who's she really?

Feb-18-2006 07:40

crud, Agatha has 3 syallables. >.<

Feb-18-2006 07:42

Not sure if she's drunk
She is known as Agatha
But who's she really?

There we go.

Feb-20-2006 11:37

I think I'm going mad
Detectives shouldn't do haiku
They should solve crimes

But when we are bored
And there are no cases left
It's something to do

I used to do this at school! bit rusty though and I probably pronounce things differently syllable-wise!

Feb-20-2006 11:44

I think perhaps you do... at first I thought you were being ironic with your first Haiku as I read it as having 6-8-4 syllables. But if you pronounce the words differently to me... meh...