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CONTEST: write a Tutorial follow up
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Irene
Irene

Oct-10-2009 05:01

Hi :-)
As a newbie, one of the first screens you meet when you log in, is the case page, and there you may "play the tutorial" to learn about the game. I guess sevral of you have played it?

Now, when that tutorial is played through, there is still a lot more to the game, that one might not know. For myself, I can admit it took me a week or two until I found the message board... Lest understood how the PM system worked...

This contest is about writing a "tutorial 2", for a newbie to play when the first tutorial is played, and perhaps a few cases is tried, to learn more about the game, so that more of the fun will be opened up to the newbie. (oh, well, and the newbie perhaps will be inspired to stay?).

Prize: every contest needs a prize, and the main prize would of course be if Ben would put up the second tutorial on the case page.
Unfortunately, I am not able to force Ben to do so, so.... all I can give is gift subscriptions - unfortunately... What if the contest can run for a month, then we have a week of voting, where everyone may vote on what they think is the best suggestion, and the winner gets 3 months gift sub?
If your suggestion covers more than one post, please number them in a way that will make us understand they go together.

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Heimlich VonVictor
Heimlich VonVictor
Vigilante

Nov-1-2009 13:18

Let’s start with pleasantries first.

Where were you last night?
Response- I was here! The entire night, and I have family who can verify it.

Alright, a little jumpy, let’s move in.

Why did you plant the keys in Sylvester Stanford’s apartment?
Response- I have no idea what you’re talking about!

Your detective senses should be tingling right now. Why would she plant the keys? Who has access to the keys? Whose alibi sounds very close to hers?

How did your brother rope you into this?
Response- I did it all for him. I did it to protect him. I’m so sorry.

We have our evidence, we have our suspect. Go get him!

Dean Davis-
Accuse- Yes

Ending-
I walked into Mickey’s Meats as Dean Davis stood behind the counter with a huge smile on his face, “Detective!” he exclaimed, “Welcome back to the grand opening of Dean’s meats!”

“Doesn’t have the same ring,” I said as I grabbed him and flipped him around, slapping handcuffs on him, “Dean Davis you’re under arrest for the murder of Mickey Miles.”

“That is absurd detective,” he shouted, “I was the one who called you! How could I be the murderer?”

I smiled, “You had me fooled at first Dean, but then the pieces came together. You were the one in debt to Sylvester Stanford. You had stolen Millie Miles’ keys the week before to make it look like a set of keys was floating out there. You knew what time Spencer got off, so you waited for him to leave and then you came in here with the intention of robbing the place, but you didn’t count on one thing.”

“Oh really?” Dean said smugly, “And what would that be detective?”

“Mickey Miles came back!” I shouted, “He came here to count the money at the end of the night to make sure nothing was missing. When he came in, he caught you red handed, and a scuffle ensued. In the end, you prevailed, knocked him to the ground, shoved the evidence into his pocket, and dropped the side of beef on him, ending his life!”

Heimlich VonVictor
Heimlich VonVictor
Vigilante

Nov-1-2009 13:18

“What about the keys in Sylvester Stanford’s apartment?” Dean demanded.

I smiled, “Well first, there was no way you would have known about that. Secondly, your sister gave you away. You had her get assigned to Stanford so she could keep an eye on him in case he decided to come after you. After you killed Mickey, you saw an out. You realized that if Stanford went away for murder, he would never be able to get you again, so your sister went over there early this morning and planted the keys in his apartment!”

Dean’s face hung, “I want an attorney.” He said solemnly.

I chuckled, “Whatever you say pal, whatever you say.”

Hopefully this explained a little more about the wide world of scripted mysteries! Remember there is much more story driven evidence, and things may be quite different from traditional random mysteries.

Don’t know if that’s what you’re looking for, but I think it could alleviate some of the questions that newbies have.

Heimlich VonVictor
Heimlich VonVictor
Vigilante

Nov-1-2009 13:38

Typo: "I nodded, "Alright, which way is he?" I inquired as Mickey pointed towards the meat freezer. "

Should say, "I nodded, "Alright, which way is he?" I inquired as Dean pointed towards the meat freezer. "

Anais Nin
Anais Nin
Thespian

Nov-1-2009 14:37

Actually, that might be good for anyone to play. If new unsubscribed people play a tutorial SM, they might better understand how Murder in Manhattan works, and might want to subscribe just to play other SMs! :)

Molly Maltese
Molly Maltese
Old Shoe

Nov-1-2009 15:44

*watches self lose*

Nice one, Heim.

Irene
Irene

Nov-2-2009 15:45

Ups, with such a good contestant, it will hardly be any contest....

So, I hereby take the liberty of "benching" the last entry from Heimlich VonVictor with the "power" of a 3 month gift sub right away. ;-)

Hm... if I were a better writer myself, I am sure I would be able to word it in a more well formulated and tasteful way...

Bottom line being:
Heimlich's entry is moved from the contest to another "division", rewarded as the winner of that division. And, the contest as such continues in the ordinary division, with the promised prize, but without Heimlic's entry.

I hope noone is offended by this slight change during the run of the contest.
- and Heimlich, if YOU WANT to, I may write your intro into the same format as the original intro is written for you, so that it will be a minimum of work for Sleuth Admin to add it (if he wants to).
- unless, of course, you want to put it together using the Scripted Mystery tool? Just give me a hint.

Molly Maltese
Molly Maltese
Old Shoe

Nov-2-2009 16:12

Heim's entry owned. My entry= low-life scum-sucking gutter-crawling never-seen-the-light-of-day malformed rodentia compared to the glory that is Heim's.

So please clarify, is he still being rewarded?

Irene
Irene

Nov-2-2009 16:35

Yes, Heimlich was rewarded. I have already sent him a 3 month gift sub.

That does not restrain him from putting in another entry in the contest if he wants to though...

Actually, there are no limit as to how many entries someone might put in.



Heimlich VonVictor
Heimlich VonVictor
Vigilante

Nov-2-2009 17:20

Thank you for the reward sub Irene :)

While I would be happy to put it into the SM editor or have you format it like the original intro, I don't know if it would work due to the coding involved with a tutorial mystery due to the hints and other choices being blanked. That's probably something we'd have to talk to Ben or Squirrel about, so probably best to hold off until we hear from them.

Paranoid_Android
Paranoid_Android
Story Teller

Nov-2-2009 17:26

Anything that needs 'blanking' or something above and beyond what you'd expect to see in a SM or normal Mystery is in Ben's domain. But 'most' of what I saw could be done within the confines of the normal editor.

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